“I’m losing all memories” My brother yells.
“Hold on”I yell back
‘I’m trying to hold on,’ he shouted
Hold on tighter I”m coming” I run towards the sound of my brother's voice just in time to see all of his memories sucked out of him.
“NO” I yell there is no way I could let that happen. I've got to turn off that machine and quick. I run towards the whirling machine.
“Where's the off button?”I whisper to myself.
“There”I whisper again
‘BEEP BEEP BEEP TURNING OFF’ the machine booms
“Wow what happened?”asks my brother.
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