Wow!. This is such an awesome view!. Me, Mum, Dad and Abbie (my sister) were on a beautiful canyon in the USA. All these other people were going really close to the edge of the can-.
“AHHH!” The man fell from the edge and is holding on to a small tree!. …….. “I'm trying to hold on!” He shouted. One man grabs the mans hand then everyone helps.
“1… 2… 3… HEAVE” We all pull as hard as we possibly can. We all pull pull pull PULL. BUT. then one man slips. It all went silent.
We all… go...down
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