Wednesday, March 11, 2020

100WC - Week #24 - Madison

I’m trying to hold on,” he shouted.
You are not,” I yelled to my brother.                                                                                                           “Yes I am,” he shouted back.
He was dangling from the school monkey bars and
probably about to fall off.
THUMP
He had just jumped off.
Why were you up there in the first place?” I asked him.
I don't know,” he said.
Ow!” he grizzled.
What?” I asked.
My arm is sore,” he said.
So what,” I said.
It hurts,” he said.
We went to go find Mum and Dad.
On the way there he said
Tricked you!
Little brothers can be super annoying!

2 comments:

  1. Hi madison!!
    I like how you used your little brother in the story... And was this real?
    from Mia

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  2. Hi Mia,
    It was real like 1 year ago maybe.
    Mad

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