Wednesday, March 11, 2020

Mia - 100WC - Week #24

“What are you doing??” I ask.

“I am looking at the great view!?” My little brother tells me.
“Up there you're not!” I say looking up at the roof.
“Why not?” he said. 
“Your going to fall of up there! I can see your butt slipping!” I say getting worried.
“ARGH!” My brother says with his hands holding on to the edge of the roof.
“I’ll go get a ladder! Hold on!” I shout.
“I’m trying to hold on…” He said. 
“I’m coming!!” I heard my brother scream and then a big thump that  sounded like someone hit the ground...
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  1. AnonymousMarch 11, 2020 at 1:58 PM

    Hi Mia,
    I like your story a lot.
    I especially liked the ending!!
    Do you want a little brother?
    Madi

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