oh no ! my banana
milkshake wait what a best fruit talent show “the banana said”
I shall attend that and I will win ,my talent will be
keeping healthy and good looking. So the weeks past until he found this formula
it said “trying to keep your body healthy and good looking try this out you’ll
be dazzling “ the banana was so amazed that he didn’t realize he found that
from the bottom of the dumpster that was slipping out the bottom when he was
heading home he found it in the store under the cereals where the protein
powder used to be
This banana was burglar and he was very good at sneaking things
out like that so he stole the powder and when he got home he put it in some
water and drank it 3 weeks later he noticed some type of purple hairy show up
on his skin oh no the banana said the talent show is tomorrow on the
pamphlet it said anyone who disobeys there talent will get thrown into a
volcano and swimming in there for 1 minute if he survives he will be put back
in the contest so the next day he just didn’t show up.
Hi Ruby
ReplyDeleteWhat a lot of exciting things happened in your 100WC. You have some wonderful ideas. Think about adding some punctuation next time you write. It makes is much easier for the reader to understand your story.
Mrs P, Team 100WC
Wellington, New Zealand