Once upon a time in a far away land, there lived a hairy volcano and it always erupts every year but one year it erupted and a purple banana came out and it looked like it was in a swimming pool,
‘’ whoa’’ i said to mum. ‘’ look at that hairy volcano’’ i exclaimed to mum.
‘’Wow isn’t that a purple banana swimming’’ said mum.
‘’Yeah’’ I said, ‘’that is really random’’ i said really confused.
‘’Shall we go investigate’’ I said really excited.
‘’No this hairy volcano with a purple banana swimming coming out of it. It might be dangerous’’ says mum.
‘’Seriously way to burst my bubble’’ some of that I mumble.
We’ll what a waste of a day.
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