Shrek hated the moon. He wanted to destroy it so he went to Rockets “R” Us and Shrek got ready to fly. On the 13 of July he got into the rocket and flew up into space. When he was there Shrek heard a noise in the space fringe. Then Donkey came out. Suddenly (since it was the 13th and the number 13 is unlucky) their rocket exploded and they fell down into Shrek’s swamp. Shrek put his hands up were the moon is and said, “yay the moon is still there,” sarcastically. Then he throw a rock at Donkey.
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