Thursday, July 25, 2019

special Promp #4-Liam


One day I was going for a hike i was eating my banana 
But what I didn't realise that i was walking up mount lava.
I look at my phone to see the news and the news says mount 
Lava is going to erupt.
I see lava coming and then before you know it, I'm swimming in it 
My skin is burning it is burning so much i turn purple.

Then I see bigfoot and woah he is hairy.
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1 comment:

  1. mthamJuly 30, 2019 at 6:06 PM

    Hi Liam,
    Yikes, I have a really clear picture in my head of your purple skin that has been burnt by the hot lava. Ouch!

    Have a think about your tenses (was/is, see/saw, said/say) to make sure that they are consistent throughout your story. However, good job on an entertaining way of putting your prompt words together into an entertaining story.

    Well done,
    Michelle Team 100wc
    Melbourne, Australia

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