All generators are down.... 12 Hours on the clock, No time to lose. I start charging towards the locker I pull open the doors and shut myself inside! Heavily breathing from my chest. A strange man… a KILLER! Walks past with a.. Machete in his hand. . . My panting starts getting louder trying to catch my breathe! The man Overlooks his shoulder… I slam open the dors and rush towards the first generator. The Man Dashes across the forest and not seeing me. I start fixing the generator… Then a SNAP!... I began Yelling, As the machete comes flying towards me, Then i noticed…….
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