Sunday, September 22, 2019
100 WC -Abby. Jacob The Greedy
A boy was riding along the street in his mini yellow limo. The boy (called Jacob) belonged to some rich parents which made Jacob a greedy little boy. His parents said that he could have a bike but he wanted the best and most expensive mini limo in the store! The time he was at the store a old woman warned the greedily boy to stop wanting everything. But the boy didn’t listen and when he saw a pot hole Jacob pushed the breaks desperate to stop but they were stuck. Jacob fell and drowned in the sewers from greed.
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Hi Abby
ReplyDeleteI really like the idea of the yellow limo,
You’re very intelligent,
Keep the great work up.
From Abby
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This is a great story. You are very creative and imaginative. I really enjoy your story. Keep up the great writing.
ReplyDeleteLeon.