Sunday, September 22, 2019

100WC#3 - Biankha

I was riding to school on my  yellow bicycle, there was a sign that said watch out wet pavement ahead, I couldn't read it so just kept on going . Dang I’m stuck in this wet pavement my bicycle was sinking I was sinking everything was sinking so I quickly jumped out and ran home. Mum said Biankha what are you doing home ,I said me and my bike go suck in this wet pavement and there was this sign but I couldn't read it, I think it said wet pavement. Mum said greedily you were warned so don't complain about it. Ok fine but now I am desperate to go to school and tell everyone.
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1 comment:

  1. Mrs PSeptember 29, 2019 at 8:49 PM

    Hi Biankha
    I like the idea of your bicycle sinking in the wet pavement. I wonder why that happened. You have managed to use all 5 words from the 100WC prompt. Next time remember to use full stops in your writing. It makes it much easier for the reader.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

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