Sunday, September 22, 2019

100WC Week #3 - Lachlan P

Once  I was riding my yellow bicycle and popping wheelies then I fell off then desperately I got back on my bike and greedily go to the dairy and buy a chocolate bar. I biked home then my Dad said "why do you have a chocolate bar your mum is going to be mad at you so eat it qickly" then mum came out side and saw me eating the chocolate and snapped me.

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