Avocado Bones Purple
Elephant Seahorses
One day me and my Mum wanted to
have a girl’s day out and then Dad said sure you girl’s can go and do that so
then Mum and I went to town and we saw purple
seahorse’s. Then I said to Mum can I please
get one.
Two month’s later Dad decided to
go on a trip and then Mum said that was a great Idea. So then we all went on a
trip and then on our trip we saw aElephant on
the main road.
Then Mum said look next to the Elephant there’s bone’s what do we do with them My Big
Sister said. Then Dad said not quite shore what do you think mother? Then mum said let’s just go so then
we did.
Hey Maggie do you want to get me
the Avocado’s I’m starving so then Maggie
got them then Mum ate them. Then Mum yelled GET OUT OF THE WAY to the Elephant so then the Elephant moved.
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