It was a busy day down at
London everyone was surrounding the gates.
What
am I talking about you may ask, some very exciting stuff. Right down by the
gates there were these two tall things. Heavy and brown with metal skin
waiting to be put on the ground. Down the crane goes lower and lower till it
HITS the ground.
the people were so excited they jumped over the gates the
policemen were running after them until they crash over and everyone starts
crying the earth starts flooding and we are all going to die tonight "Run Run" they all say.
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