Suddenly a blast of frozen ice whistled past my ear. I stared, right in front of me was a person that had a gun in one hand and another sort of weapon in the other I guessed that was what made the frozen ice balls that were scattered around the classroom.
The man froze to, ¨Well, well, well I thought I got you¨ he said sounding confused. I stared at him with my mouth right open. Suddenly he blasted the gun, I froze, but out of nowhere a person blocked the gunfire and fell to the ground, and then all I could remember was the man getting arrested.
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