“I was just biking to the house with a crate full of pumpkins from the shed, when all of a sudden a giant hay bale just popped up out of nowhere!” I say into the phone that afternoon. “I see, but are you sure that it wasn't there before?” replies my Mum. “Yes! It just popped up out of nowhere!” I say exasperated. “Okay, well stay where you are, I’ll be home soon,” says my Mum. “It’s not as if I can move anyway!” I reply. “Why?” “Because I’m stuck in the hay bale!” The line went dead. “Come on!”
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