I was biking home after collecting food from my grandma. I was so hungry, so I started to bike faster and faster. But then I took a swerve. I was out of control! I flew off my bike and into the hay. When I got out of the hay I was covered! I snatched my bike and looked down to see all my food ruined! So I picked the food up and threw it in the rubbish and biked home slowly thinking ¨today is not my day¨ and when I got home I threw myself into bed and got a good sleep.
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