Sunday, February 24, 2019

100wc- #22-Liam

Today was the first day of the holidays and dad said hey kids and we said yeah do you guys want to get some hot chips and we SHOUTED YEAH!!. So we went to the first shop that we saw had hot chips. We got vinegar on our hot chips and It was way to sharp and way to gross. I don't know why they use vinegar on food Isn’t supposed to be for stings like jellyfish stings and I’m pretty sure It Is used for bee stings.
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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousMarch 3, 2019 at 8:54 AM

    Liam,
    I like how you used vinegar for both of its uses: as a condiment AND as a medicine in this piece. Remember to check carefully when you are writing homophones so you are sure which word you are using. TO, TOO, and TWO are examples of homophones.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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  2. AnonymousMarch 4, 2019 at 8:44 AM

    Hello, I like how you put hot chips in your piece, but you need to watch out for comma placing and run one. Your friend, aden

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