Thursday, February 14, 2019

100WC - Week #20 Brendan

One day I got out my guitar and it did not sound very well. So I took it to the music shop they said it was out of tune so I bought a guitar tuner. Then I went home and I tried to tune it but I didn't know how to use it so I had to go all the way back to the music shop to know how to use it. So I went all the way back to the music shop so when I went back it was closed. So I went back home and had dinner and went to bed.
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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2019 at 1:59 PM

    3 things. one, it needs more full stops. two, it dosen't make sence. and three, you need capital letters ok?

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2019 at 10:05 PM

    Yay, a New Zealand entry :)
    I can totally relate to your problem Brendan, but admit that these days, I google 'guitar tuner.'
    If you read this again you'll find you've used the word'so' several times. I wonder if you needed this at the beginning of sentences?
    Thanks for sharing,
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Plymouth

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