Wednesday, February 27, 2019

100wc-week22-Emma

Ok my first ever time tasting Salt and Vinegar chips Three Two One go.CRUNCH CRUNCH ew its way to vinegary yuck.
¨Mum! Do we have Ready Salted chips I don't like Salt and Vinegar.¨I said.
¨Yes honey we do.I thought you would have liked Salt and Vinegar chips.¨Replied Mum
¨Well here is what I think of them.They are to vinegary for me i´m not a big fan of vinegar¨I called back.
¨OK honey here they are.Remember share them with your sisters.¨Said Mum
¨Fine fine fine I will I will I will.¨I Replied

1 comment:

  1. I really liked this story but maybe make this story make a bit more sense. I also hate vinegar chips as well. For me it was kind of confusing after you asked Mum for the different chips like when your sisters magically appeared after that part.
    From Mohammad

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