Thursday, February 14, 2019

100WC week 20-Brooke

The guitar was lying there I didn’t know if I should pick it up, play it ,or leave it.  I decided to pick it up.  I moved my fingers over the guitar and immediately dropped it! It was completely out of tune!
 The guitar had made a horrible screeching noise, I did not like it, really I thought, who would have tuned it to make that horrible noise.  I tried it again and  the guitar made the noise again.
I decided someone would have to tune that to make it sound better.  I was going to.  I picked up the guitar turned my fingers over the things at the end…..but I had tuned it up and now it was even worse.  I kept trying and eventually got it right phew! I thought, a lot of work to do.

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5 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2019 at 1:52 PM

    I really liked your story it makes good Cence that happened to me once

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2019 at 1:54 PM

    good job brooke i really like it

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  3. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2019 at 1:58 PM

    hi Brooke
    that sentence that said I kept trying and eventually got it right phew,when it said phew if you put it in google translate it would say it sraight away so maybe you could put a comma between right and phew, but thats what i thought
    and it was a really good peice of writing
    kind regards
    kate

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  4. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2019 at 2:00 PM

    hi brooke I really liked it so cool
    charli

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  5. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2019 at 2:01 PM

    hi Brooke
    that sentence that said I kept trying and eventually got it right phew,when it said phew if you put it in google translate it would say it sraight away so maybe you could put a comma between right and phew, but thats what i thought
    and it was a really good peice of writing
    kind regards
    kate

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