Wednesday, February 27, 2019

100WC-Week#22-Keira

I was doing a science experiment in school me and my buddy thought we should make a volcano. We had got all the ingredients from the staff room and then put all the stuff in. when it was time to show the class i had said ¨ We have made a volcano that will actually explode¨                    everyone starts screaming and saying ¨do it do it so we pored a little bit of vinegar in together and then POOF it exploded it looks so awesome, but we all taste the vinegar it tasted really weird the vinegar was so sharp tasting.

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  1. AnonymousFebruary 27, 2019 at 12:49 PM

    i like the way that you said what the vinegar was to sharp.

    next time think about adding more description.

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  2. McBreezyMarch 3, 2019 at 3:22 AM

    Keira-
    I like that you raided the staff room for supplies. As a kid I always wondered what they had in there. As a teacher,I'm disappointed that it isn't more fun. Maybe if I blow up a volcano in there it will seem fun. Great writing! I would suggest using more specific words instead of "stuff" it will help the reader understand exactly what you mean.
    Write often,
    Ms. McBride #team100wc Los Angeles

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  3. AnonymousMarch 4, 2019 at 1:57 PM

    hmmmm that was very nice keira i used to make a volcano in my old school maybe how it works is as a vinegar or baking soda but that was nice or maybe that works for you okay? forget it ignore what i comment okay keira

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