“It’s a disaster” I screamed “everything's ruined” Oh I’m sorry didn’t see you there I’ll go back to the beginning for you. It was a Sunday morning and I was preparing for my piano recital I had wheeled my piano onto the stage and was grabbing my flute (for the finale) and grabbing my notes when CRASH I had dropped my flute and had completely destroyed it. So we went out and brought a new one everything was perfect and the recital went quickly soon it was time for my flute FLUBBER FLOP it was completely out of tune everything's ruined so I cried and cried.
Thursday, February 14, 2019
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your writing is really good but you don't have any full stops Brendan
ReplyDeletehi charlee it is really good but mabie next time put more full stops in
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