I was walking on a footpath when I fall into a hole filled with cobwebs and red glowing lights. As I fell down it got darker and colder. I could barely breathe until I hit the ground, my body ached. As I sat up and looked across the room I saw these dark figures, until the got close enough I could see what they were. they began to speak. the orange one spoke first.” what ar,”
“Ah” I scream, my body flicks up then back down,”it was just a dream,” I reassure myself. But till this day I still wonder what he was going to say.
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