“It was the night of Christmas. Me and my brother Cooper were so excited. That day we went to the shops to buy all the things to decorate the
apartment because we went to Australia for Christmas. Back to Christmas.
When we went shopping mum said that we need to get red and green decorations.
Christmas is my favourite holiday I like Christmas because it is fun and especially
because we get to go to Australia. when we got back mum said that we had
to go to bed because it was Christmas tomorrow. And it was going to be a long
day.
I hope you have a good Christmas
Merry Christmas!
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