My brother and I were at a really big theme park, when we
spotted a giant ferris wheel.
“Can we go on it,” said my brother.
It looked really exciting ...but should I really do this?...
What if I vomit at the tippy top, what if I fall out of
the seat thingy, what if…
The possibilities were endless!
As we lined up to hop on I remembered the chocolate milkshake
I had half an hour ago.
Oh, boy did I regret that!
“Could you please board the ferris wheel,”
This was going to be the trip of a lifetime!
spotted a giant ferris wheel.
“Can we go on it,” said my brother.
It looked really exciting ...but should I really do this?...
What if I vomit at the tippy top, what if I fall out of
the seat thingy, what if…
The possibilities were endless!
As we lined up to hop on I remembered the chocolate milkshake
I had half an hour ago.
Oh, boy did I regret that!
“Could you please board the ferris wheel,”
This was going to be the trip of a lifetime!
Hi Madi,
ReplyDeleteWell done on your writing this week. I love how you used your personal voice in your story I can really tell that you wrote it.Perhaps next time you could try replacing some of the words in your story for and example "We were at a gigantic snow mountain". But overall well done.
Keep on writing,
Bailee