It was a sunny morning, me and my dog Chocolate went down to the river side.
Trying to take my mind off what happened to my cat, He had just got run over by a car on the weekends.
When Chocolate saw the river he seemed to be sad.
I wonder what was wrong when I realised, I took Chocolate and Lexi here to play every morning.
Chocolate was sitting down and whining.
I didn’t like to see him upset, it just made me feel sick.
Trying to cheer him up, I walked over and sat down next to him.
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