My Dad had just bought Chinese, we were sitting down on the couch watching a movie that’s how we always spend our Friday nights.
“Alisa!” My dad said while sitting in his CHAIR “Can you please put my BOX in the bin!”
“OK.” I replied
I grabbed his box and my rubbish, then went outside.
It was really cold and I could hear something rattling in the bin…..
“A RACCOON!!” I screamed
The raccoon ran up a tree, a LEAF fell from the SKY.
“Oh on….” Me and my dad forgot it was fall.
Leaves slowly fell from the sky……...
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