“Argggggg! I yell.
As my brother scurried off
with the inflatable ball, and jumped into the pool.I scurried after him, I then
swam under him and grabbed the ball from underneath but he held onto it so
tight that it would not budge.
I was so cross that I ran after him and pushed him into the
pool.I’ve got the ball, well not now.As I watch my brother dive back into the
pool with it tight in his arms.Me and my brother kept playing on and on, that
in the end we started laughing out loud, now I wasn’t cross at all.
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