¨Its 6:30,¨yelled Rachel as
she takes a sip of her coffee, ¨Sarah, Billy wake up!¨ Rachel walks to their
rooms slowly trying not to spill her coffee. ¨Gosh damn it,¨as Rachel lifts her
foot to flick the piece of Lego off, ¨Coming Mum¨ yelled Billy as he pushes
past her not knowing that she is holding a cup of coffee, ¨Oopsy sorry Mummy,¨
¨That's OK,¨ replied Rachel, ¨Not just my good WHITE worktop
that now has a big brown stain on it,¨ she mumbled I was so
cross that I spilt more coffee on my top. Well I better start doing the
washing.
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