Creeping slowly through the woods we
see a abandoned candy store “lets go inside” shyla whispered creepily
“NO” I accidentally yell
“be quiet”shyla giggles
“the ghosts might hear us” she
cracks up laughing after she said that sentence. She runs off “i'm not staying
here on my own so ill come with you”. “My mind is playing tricks on me again” I
moan she didn't hear me “wait where is shyla”
“booo” she suddenly jumps out behind
me I scream for how knows long.
“Let's go “we quickly scatter to the
abandoned candy store “AHHHHHH” I yell I wake up in my bed thank goodness it's
not real I sigh in relief.
Hello Olivia, I like how you made the speaking clear and detailed, but you need to work on spacing and periods. Your friend, Aden
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