Thursday, May 24, 2018

100 word challenge Week #32 by Dillan

There once was a scientist who gave instructions to make a monster to take over the world but his partner in crime. “But I didn’t understand the instructions” muttered mad 2 in a sad tone. “Its ok if you don’t understand things, I can do the head you can build the legs i’ll do the brain and spinal cord” exclaimed mad 1 to mad 2. Then they got straight to work. 17 hours later they went out with there brand new cijuw and it got blown up by the bot team pacific rims. And then they were put in prison for life and sentenced to death so that’s that.   

by Dillan Riches

4 comments:

  1. Hello Dillan. It's a tough call including lots of dialogue, but you did a great job! You also included some great words like, 'sad tone' and 'exclaimed' which make your work interesting to read. Well done Dillan - keep up the super writing.
    Heidi (Team 100, New Zealand).

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  3. HI GOOD JOB DILLAN INTERSTING AND COOL

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  4. Nice job with the writing I like how you put a robot in the story.
    Abbie

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