The Horse that can Teleport
“Diamond where are you, do you want to go for a ride “I shouted
“Yes yes,“ Diamond said. "Where do you want to go?”
"Where ever you want “
“How about the Dolly Forest?" “No” you said i could choose”
“Okay” . So off they went. When they got there they hid behind a bush so they did not get seen. After a
bit I got of Diamonds back and we came out from behind the bush and just then
was when i tripped and all the dolls came out Diamond held them of for a
while then diamond looked and seen a doll had a knife with blood on it...
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