Thursday, May 17, 2018

100wc week#31 by Issy M

The Sphinx.

Once there lived a magical animal called the sphinx. It is half bird half giant cat. It lives in the whispering woods and guards a magic hour glass. The hour glass is magic because it holds the power of healing the sick. There is only 1 left of the sphinx.  The sphinx was discovered in 1800.  It was just a baby when it was discovered.  When the explorer healed it, it flew away and was never seen again.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Issy,

    A number of adventures have been written using characters from history as a base. You achieved this with the Sphinx and brought it to life in your story but added your own idea when it was half bird and half cat (the Sphinx of Egypt had a human head and body of a lion). Well done.

    I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. It's obvious you have creative ideas to share and are developing your skills as a writer.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

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