It was a windy day in Las Vegas. I order a present for my dad. It was a cool present as well. I ordered it from New Zealand. So when I get to Las Vegas it will hopefully be there or not .I'm staying with my Dad and he's got a cool house. It will be fun. The next day I went to the dealership I saw the present I said ¨When did it arrive¨ The man said it arrived this morning I drove it back to Dad's house I covered it up with tarp and then surprise.
Thursday, May 10, 2018
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ReplyDeleteHi Laine
ReplyDeleteI really like the story it is very creative and a good story to read i like it because of the different places you said and where you where i like the story