Thursday, August 30, 2018

100wc special prompt #6 Rebecca


“Mum where are my pink pants?” I yelled from the bottom of the stairs.  
“We are going to the river you don’t need to find your jeans.” Mum replied.  Mum had cooked some cookies to take to the river for something to eat. 
Once we got to Lake Karapiro I started to get nervous about going on the biscuit.  The night before my Dad had worked me up saying that if it flips you will drown, so you have got to hold on.  I didn't want to fall off and drown.  I was too young to drown.
When it was my turn I loved it.  


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2 comments:

  1. UnknownSeptember 2, 2018 at 5:08 PM

    Hi Rebecca, I enjoyed your story as I know how nervous you can get before going on the biscuit. I wonder if you could use some more adjectives in your story to help us to visualize what you are writing about. (Fiona TEAM100WC)

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 4, 2018 at 2:18 PM

    Hi Rebecca
    I really enjoyed your story because It reminded me when I go to the lake and have so much fun.
    Nice work
    by Rita

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