It was a hot sunny day time for a lime thickshake "Mum can I go get a thick shake’’
‘‘No’’ said Mum. "but you can go get some ice?’"
"What for’’ I asked
"The power's out and the meat will go rotten’’
"Okay, okay., that will be 20 dollars’’
"No way you're not getting a thickshake so you only need 5 dollars’’ says Mum. I stomp out the door flames coming out my ears. I look at the clock in the shop it says fishing time. I go get my fishing rod and go to the regular spot.
Wednesday, August 8, 2018
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i liked this because it made me think of when i was little and shopping with my dad
ReplyDeleteHi tom
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you feel anger in your story with the flames coming out of your ears
great job
From Rita