It was just an ordinary day in the office of being the mailman pushing the cart round delivering mail, after mail, after mail. But this was not just any mail, this was mine. It said, To Karl, 34 Action Road this might be my scholarship for a rugby team. I tore it open. As I read the contents of the letter, I was aware of the smile on my face. It said you have been accepted in the All Blacks trial on the 30 of May 2018. That day I walked to the sport shop in my break….
Wednesday, August 22, 2018
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That was a great piece of writing Tom I liked the bold letters and detail.
ReplyDeletevery nice setting i liked how you put detail into your writing.
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