Ouchhh!!! That is so hot, why did I do that! I knew flaming hot sauce was hot, I told
myself in my head.
"Hahaha, you're
so stupid" my brother said.
"It’s not funny
you idiot" I said.
"Stop fighting
kids" Mum said. "Look at the
clock it’s 8:50, you're late again because of your bickering, I will go get
your regularly lime juice, you get changed."
"Can I have ice
please" I said.
10 minutes later…..
"Thank you that
was a great juice" we said.
"That's okay,
now get in the car." Mum said.
Where is everyone, no
one is at school today …
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