It was two days till my birthday, I was planning who I was inviting. I told mum that my party will be at the water park down the road. I had planned it all and finally fell asleep. One more day I thought to myself. I kept planning for the birthday. Then it was the next day. DING DONG, the doorbell rang, all my friends were standing at the door in their togs.
“Lets go.” I said.
“Let’s go.” said my friends. We walked to the water park. My friends told me to go down the massive hydro slide. “Why would I do that?” I exclaimed.
“We will all do it.” they said. That made me feel better
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