The world
The world is like salt all hard and sour
The world is getting brown all gooey and melted
The animals are hot especially giraffe and hippos
The fish in the water are getting greasy and shallow
The world is destroyed lets go and fix it
If you come write now you can get a discount
It was almost night time and everyone was tired
Everyone wanted sleep everyone was desidered
we went to bed with a plan in our head and held it in for tomorrow
As we lay our head down we heard ding ding ding it was 7am instead.
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