“Hurry
up we're going to be late for school,” screamed Patrick as Gerald was running
down the hallway nearly tripping up on his untied shoelaces,“Bye Mum,” they
yelled and went out the door, “don't forget your lunch,” she says kissing us on
the cheek,” be careful,”
”
yeah yeah we know ,”they pick up their scooters and soon as you know it their
on their way. “Ahh!” yelled Patrick as he fell face down to the ground. Gerald
just couldn’t stop laughing,” you're the worst brother ever,” said Patrick as
he picks up his scooter. ,”Yeah I am,” said Gereld.
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