Monday, May 13, 2019

100WC - Week #30 - Abby. The Kidnap

Ruby and me were going to get that giraffe and take him to our house. It was midnight and we were next to the Harald truck. We called him Gerald because, hey he’s a giraffe. We approach the front door and it’s door is unlocked! Luck is coming our way! “Can we go home?” wined Ruby. “No!” I hissed, “we’ll get that giraffe!” I stepped into the dark room when Ruby screams. “AHHHHHHHHH!” “Ruby it’s a fake brain!” I whisper. But she was looking at something behind us. Gerald just couldn’t stop laughing. We heard police sirens. We were caught.
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1 comment:

  1. Ms NewtonMay 15, 2019 at 4:39 PM

    Cool little story here Abby, well done. I liked the suspense you used, by your character hissing and whispering. I also liked how you used sentences of varying lengths.
    Ms Newton :)

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