Sunday, May 26, 2019

100WC - Week #32 - Biankha

was going to school on my scooter with my extremely hot laté my laté tiped all over me and I fell in a rose bush then I turned transparent I was so excited but I ended up late to school I was like ten minutes late but I just said i was at the dentist but then I wrote what i did for free writing when I turned transparent i was losing control and im fell over a couple of times but I did it so excitedly witch is weird I think when I got to class i was fine
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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 26, 2019 at 3:16 PM

    i like how you made it very discripteve and you really painted a picture in my mind.-Abbie

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  2. AnonymousJune 1, 2019 at 10:11 AM

    Biankha,
    WOW! The narrator certainly had a rough go of it. I guess being transparent could have its ups and downs.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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