One day me and my best friend
went to a planet that no one has ever seen before and we are the only ones that
have seen it. It had branches and it is
in a forest and it took us both fifteen hours on the plane to get here. We both saw logs and fire and moss stuff and
she said that it smells BAD and I said the same thing to her.
Then that day it was getting
very dark and so then we had to find a place to sleep and so we did we had to
sleep under one of the trees and then the next day it smelt like bad smoke and then
she said to me do you want to play a game in here and I said no because it
might be bad and it still looks very hot.
On that day we had nothing to
eat or drink and the logs were getting smoke into our little smoke house and it
was not good at all.
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