“Hurry up you're late”yelled the cooking teacher.
“Sorry!” I yelled back.
I ran to get on with the cooking.
“We are baking bread today”The teacher said excitedly.
I hurried up with my cooking,suddenly this scooter barged into my back.
“Arrggg!” I yelped.
I looked down and to my surprise a dog was looking up at me.He must have smelled my bread.Then suddenly the dog jumped onto the table knocked over the vase on my table, a rose fell onto my bread taking the scent away.Then the dog just trotted away as if nothing had happened.Bang! I saw a transparent bowl fall onto the floor.What else could go worse!
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