Saturday, May 11, 2019

100WC - Week #29 - Riley

Slowly the brown spotted Giraffe walked in new york city going towards the hospital. Now blending a giraffe into a crowded city is not easy especially if it tried to blend itself in and coming from africa does not help. Also personally I do not usually see giraffes going into hospitals a lot so just like you usually would I went and asked it why it was going in there. He said “oh I was cooking with chicken and I spilled some melted butter on the ground so I was going to get a cloth and I slipped on it. It turns out It is very greasy so I came here to see the doctor.”  
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3 comments:

  1. UnknownMay 12, 2019 at 5:27 PM

    I liked how you described the giraffe talking about the accident. I like how you highlighted the words. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks!

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  2. AnonymousMay 13, 2019 at 8:29 AM

    I really liked the creativity in this piece. Maybe if you put the end before the beginning then it would make more sense. Other then that, it was really good.

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  3. AnonymousMay 16, 2019 at 2:33 PM

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