Tuesday, August 6, 2019
Aug 19 (6) - 100WC - Laine
I the weekend I was going to go to my friends house when I heard a noise it was a weird one as well. I was going through the bush when I heard it.It sounded like a group not just one person so I kept walking and I heard them before I saw them I was creeping me out. But finally I got there and then before I saw them they had my back and I screamed out for help. And my friends came out with a gun and shot them it was cool he said he had been waiting for that moment.
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Hi Laine!
ReplyDeleteI liked your story. It is a good use of the prompt, I felt you created a very spooky atmosphere. I think all of us are familiar with that creepy feeling that maybe we are being followed.
I think next time you write you need to think about adding some more punctuation (full stops, commas, etc) as your story is a little hard to understand in places due to the lack of this. I'm sure your teacher can help you overcome this hurdle!
Keep on writing!
Ana, Oxford UK, Team 100