One night It was my big brother’s birthday and mum said to my big brother we should go on a tropical cruise so then we did. Then Mum in the middle of the night Quietly packed the bag’s and then we sailed. We only had 2 cats and we brought them with us then it was dark and we sailed
Then a few weeks later there was a boat at my house and then I took it to the beach and then Dad said where are you going and I said the beach do you want to come I said yes but quietly.
Then a few weeks later there was a boat at my house and then I took it to the beach and then Dad said where are you going and I said the beach do you want to come I said yes but quietly.
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