Gradually, things started to move. My brother and I were standing in
a big dome shaped building that our father’s spy agent had trapped us in.
“What I still don’t get is, why would he want to trap us in here all alone?”
“What I still don’t get is, why would he want to trap us in here all alone?”
asked my brother.
“Because we knew that he was not Dad’s actual agent, silly,” I replied,
“Because we knew that he was not Dad’s actual agent, silly,” I replied,
“And plus, you’re not alone, you have me!”
“Yeah, well that’s different!” he says.
Bang! Bang! Bang!
“Are you two in there?” asks the agent.
“Yes,” my brother and I say quietly.
“Your father is dead…”
My brother and I gasp...
Bang! Bang! Bang!
“Are you two in there?” asks the agent.
“Yes,” my brother and I say quietly.
“Your father is dead…”
My brother and I gasp...
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